IELTS Essay How to Write an Introduction Using Paraphrasing
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In this lesson, you can learn about paraphrasing
in IELTS essays.
First question: what’s paraphrasing?
Paraphrasing means saying the same thing in
a different way.
But, I’m guessing you already knew that.
Probably, you’re watching this video because
you think you need to paraphrase the question
in your IELTS essay introduction, and you
aren’t sure how to do it.
We’re making this video because there’s
a lot of bad or inaccurate advice about paraphrasing
around, and many IELTS students have the wrong
idea about what paraphrasing is and how they
should use it in their IELTS essay.
With our IELTS students, we often have to
spend time breaking down bad habits and bad
ideas which students have about this.
So, in this lesson, you can learn the truth
about paraphrasing in your IELTS essay.
You’ll see the number one mistake that IELTS
students make with paraphrasing, and you’ll
learn how to use paraphrase effectively in
your IELTS writing exam.
Let’s start with something that might surprise
you:
What?
But wait, I saw this video, and it said I
should paraphrase the question in my introduction.
But wait, I read this article, and it said
I should paraphrase the question in my introduction.
But wait, my teacher told me I should paraphrase
the question in my introduction.
Okay, we know.
There’s a lot of IELTS advice out there
that says, ‘paraphrase the question in your
introduction.’
Why should you listen when we say you don’t
need to?
Don’t pay attention to us; pay attention
to the official IELTS scoring scheme.
To save you time, we’ve added links to the
official scoring scheme under the video.
You can read it right now!
Go ahead; read the scoring scheme and find
the word ‘paraphrase’.
We can save you some time: it isn’t there.
Remember, this is the official scoring system,
which the examiners use to mark your IELTS
writing exam.
The writing mark scheme does not talk about
paraphrase AT ALL.
Why not?
Because you don’t have to paraphrase the
question in your introduction.
Okay, you think, so how do I start my essay?
Surely paraphrasing the question is better
than nothing?
I don’t know what else to do…
Here’s how a lot of students approach paraphrasing.
See if this looks familiar to you.
Let’s take a question:
Robots, computers, and machines are becoming
more advanced, and can perform many jobs which
used to be done by people.
What problems does this cause, and how can
these problems be solved?
So, let’s practice bad paraphrasing!
Let’s see now, we need to change the words.
Let’s find some synonyms:
robot = automaton
advanced = cutting-edge
machine = apparatus
job = assignment
people = folks
Wow, great synonyms, right?
Let’s plug them into our sentence to create
a bad paraphrase:
Automata, computers, and apparatus are becoming
more cutting-edge, and can perform many assignments
which used to be done by folks.
Let’s change a couple of small things so
it’s not so close to the original:
Automata, computers, and apparatus are more
and more cutting-edge, and can do many assignments
which were done by folks in the past.
Finished!
What a great paraphrase!
No, no, no!
This is terrible, and it will only hurt your
IELTS score.
Don’t do this!
This is what many IELTS students do, but it’s
a bad idea.
Let’s see why this doesn’t work.
First, a question: what’s a synonym?
You probably said something like, “a word
with the same meaning as another word.”
That’s more or less true.
However, a true synonym is a word which can
replace another word in any sentence.
So, imagine you have two words: A and B.
If word A can be replaced with word B in any
sentence, they’re synonyms.
If word A can be replaced with word B sometimes,
but not always, they’re not true synonyms.
Maybe they have a similar meaning, but they
aren’t the same.
What’s the point of all this?
The point is that there are very few true
synonyms in English, or any language.
Just because two words have the same meaning
does not mean they can be used in the same
way.
The words people and folks have the same basic
meaning, but that doesn’t mean that you
can say folks any time you say people.
They aren’t true synonyms.
Why not?
Because vocabulary usage depends on more than
just meaning.
Register and collocation are equally important.
Also, many words which have a similar meaning
don’t have exactly the same meaning.
Machine and apparatus are similar, but they
aren’t the same.
Job and assignment are similar, but they aren’t
the same.
So, that’s problem number one.
When you use words that you think are synonyms,
they probably aren’t true synonyms.
That means you’re changing the meaning—which
is dangerous—and also making language mistakes,
which can hurt your vocabulary score.
There’s a second problem: this is a really
weird and unnatural thing to do.
Imagine someone asks you a question.
What do you do?
Do you repeat the question back, using different
words?
Hey!
How was your weekend?
Ah…
You wish to enquire about my recent non-working
days?
How’s the weather in the US?
So…
You want to know about the climatic conditions
in North America?
No!
This is weird!
When someone asks you a question, you answer
the question.
Your IELTS essay is the same.
The task asks you a question.
Your essay should answer the question.
Your answer starts from your first sentence.
Bad paraphrase adds nothing to your answer.
No paraphrase is better than bad paraphrase.
A bad paraphrase is only an empty sentence
with language mistakes.
That’s all the examiner will see.
For your IELTS score, this is only negative.
Ok, you think, so how do I start my essay?
You have two options, and it depends on your
target score.
Let’s look.
This is going to be a short section.
If your target score is 6 or maybe 6.5, and
you don’t know how to start your essay,
here’s what you do:
Write an introduction which is one sentence.
Write a thesis statement.
That means you explain what you’re going
to talk about and what you’re trying to
prove with your essay.
For example:
In this essay, I will discuss possible solutions
to the problems caused by robots and computers
taking people’s jobs.
Or: I intend to show that the problems caused
by robots and computers taking people’s
jobs are serious, but also possible to solve.
Or even: Robots and computers are replacing
people at work.
This is a serious problem, and I will discuss
how we can solve it.
That’s all you need.
But, you say, isn’t that too short?
No—not at all.
First of all, your introduction can be any
length.
Your introduction can be one
sentence.
Here’s an important point: your introduction
is the least important part of your IELTS
essay.
Are the example introductions you saw above
great?
No.
They’re not great, but they are easily good
enough.
Your conclusion is super-important.
How you organise your ideas into paragraphs
is very important.
How you support and connect your ideas is
extremely important.
Your introduction is not that important.
You can get a high score with a very basic
introduction.
So, here’s a simple solution: if you don’t
know what to write in your IELTS essay introduction,
don’t write much at all.
Write a short thesis statement, and then start
the body of your essay.
This is good advice if your target is 6 or
6.5, but what if you’re aiming for a higher
score?
So, what does effective paraphrase look like?
Remember, you’re thinking about writing
a strong IELTS essay here.
That means an essay which scores between seven
and nine.
Here’s the thing: when you write a strong
essay, you can’t think about it as lots
of separate things.
Lots of IELTS students write essays in this
way: “Ok, first I have to paraphrase the
question, then I need to write a thesis statement.
Ok, first body paragraph: I need a topic sentence,
then a supporting example, then a linking
phrase, then a second supporting example…
et cetera.”
That can work for intermediate IELTS scores:
5.5 to 6.5, but it’s not a good approach
for higher scores.
For higher scores, your essay needs to be
one coherent, connected piece.
What does that mean, practically?
And what does it have to do with paraphrasing?
First point: your first sentence should be
connected to everything else in your essay.
That means you need to know exactly where
your essay is going before you start writing.
Before you put one word on the page, you need
to know all the important things you want
to say.
Practically, that means you need to know what
your conclusion is going to be before you
start writing.
You also need to know exactly how many body
paragraphs you’re going to have, and what
you’re going to put in each one.
To be clear, that means when you write your
first sentence, you aren’t just thinking,
“How can I find a synonym for this word?”
Good paraphrasing isn’t about that.
You already know the conclusion you want to
reach, and you know the ideas you want to
discuss.
Effective paraphrasing includes this.
It shows your reader—the examiners—where
your essay is going.
Effective paraphrasing shows how you understand
the key ideas in the question, and what conclusion
your essay is trying to reach.
So, the main point: paraphrasing depends on
planning.
It’s not a simple thing; it’s not just
taking some words and replacing them with
other words—it’s connected to other parts
of your essay.
It’s connected to your ideas and opinions.
If you don’t know the conclusion of your
essay, you can’t write a good introduction.
To write a good introduction, you need to
know exactly where you’re trying to go.
Let’s see how this can work in practice.
To paraphrase effectively, you need to take
the ideas in the question and add your own
interpretation.
Here’s the question you saw before:
Some questions:
The question talks about robots, computers,
and machines.
What do these words mean in this context?
Can you think of specific examples?
What exactly does advanced mean?
Advanced in what way?
The question mentions jobs which used to be
done by people.
Like what?
The question asks: what problems does this
cause?
Are these problems serious, or not?
Why or why not?
Pause the video and think about these.
If you want to write a good introduction,
you need to have clear answers to all of these
questions!
Now, let’s see how you could effectively
paraphrase this question:
Advances in technology have led to the automation
of many jobs, especially low-level or manual
positions.
This has led to many serious problems, including
unemployment and increasing rates of poverty
and inequality.
This is what a good paraphrase looks like.
Here’s a question: which way do you think
this essay is going?
Do you think the writer will be positive,
negative or neutral about the effects of automation?
It sounds negative.
You can guess that the essay will conclude
that automation causes serious problems which
are not easy to solve.
Someone who reads the first sentence of your
introduction should be able to do the same
thing; they should be able to guess where
your essay is going.
Remember: this starts in your head.
Everything needs to be clear in your head
before you write anything.
Another point to notice: our paraphrase doesn’t
have the same sentence structure as the task.
The paraphrase is two sentences, while the
task is just one.
The task asks a question: “What problems
does this cause?”
Our paraphrase replaces this with a statement:
“This has led to many serious problems.”
Also, our paraphrase replaces general ideas
in the question with more specific ideas.
The question mentions “many jobs,” but
our paraphrase talks about “low-level or
manual positions.”
The question mentions “problems,” but
our paraphrase talks about “serious problems,
including unemployment and inequality.”
To review, to write an effective paraphrase,
you need to do three things:
One: have a clear plan in your head, with
a clear conclusion, which should be obvious
to your reader from the first sentence of
your essay.
Two: don’t try to stick too closely to the
sentence structure in the question.
Paraphrasing is about ideas, not just words.
Three: interpret and develop the ideas in
the task, so that you replace general ideas
in the task with your own more specific ones.
Now, you should understand more about how
to paraphrase in your IELTS essay.
Good luck if you have an IELTS exam coming
up soon!
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